Compare Contrast Essay... Drafting.

1.  Attendance.

2.  Papers in and out.

3.  Are you ever proud of your school work?  Why or why not?

3.5.  More C/C notes and help here.

3.6.  List of helpful transition words here.

4.  Compare contrast outline.... Model outline.  Further outline...Complete in class with grounds of grounds.

5.  Show me your completed outline for your ticket out the door.

6.  HOMEWORK!  On Monday, please have a typed draft of your compare contrast essay in class for editing.

Descriptive Essay Groups, Description, cont., C/C essay introduced.

1.  Journal:

What is MLA format?  What rules should you follow for the first (and subsequent) pages of your essay?

2. Description Editing Groups.



Editing Groups:

Please have a sheet of paper where you answer the following questions about your classmates' essays.  After you've read the essays, answer the questions on the sheet you've created and return the sheet with the essay to your group member.

While you are reading the essay, please circle any areas where you think there are mistakes.  Don't explain how to fix them (unless they ask), just notice the mistakes that you see.

Questions:

1.  What is the topic of this essay?
2.  What is the purpose of this essay?
3.  Did the essay have a beginning, middle and an end?
4.  Was the topic interesting?
5.  Did it "start in the middle of the action?"
6.  Were there so many mistakes that you couldn't focus on the essay?
7.  Would you tell another about this essay?
8.  Offer one suggestion for change to the essay.
9.  Provide 2 compliments about the essay.
10.  Do you think this is an A essay?

3.  Compare and Contrast-- Essay Plan.  Outline on the board... You have to follow my instructions, for this one, unfortunately....

4.  Possible topics... Easy.

5.  Narrative and what's next.  HOMEWORK!  Bring back your final descriptive essay and an outline for your compare and contrast essay.

Description, continued.

1.  Attendance.

2.  Papers in or out?

3.  Journal:  Summarize the story you'll tell for your descriptive essay.

4.  Tell your story to a neighbor...  Groups of 3,  I select.

5.  Homework and Questions... Description.

6.  Poem and questions....Description.

7.  Descriptive notes and reminders....  5 senses.  Concrete vs. abstract.  30 seconds.  Show don't tell.

8.  Homework-  Come to class with a draft of your descriptive essay in MLA format. 

Descriptive Essays

Descriptive Writing...

O.  Attendance

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1.  Journal:  

The poem below has a secret.  It's really about writing.  What can you learn about descriptive writing from this poem?  Why?  It's called "The Red Wheelbarrow" and is by Williams.

so much depends
upon a red wheel
barrow
glazed with rain
water
beside the white
chickens.


3.  Poem, for description purposes... thinking skill questions

Funeral Blues

TS questions:

1.  Explain which image is most powerful to you.  Why is it?
2.  Some infer that the speaker's love is timeless.  Why?
3.  Identify how the speaker is feeling.
4. Connect this poem to your own life.
5.  Analyze what the images do for the poem.  How do they work?
6.  Synthesize this poem into your own consciousness by taking away an image from the poem and replacing it with one of your own.



4.  Some notes about descriptive writing...

Concrete v. Abstract.
Show don't tell.
It's a narrative, so the premise is the same.





4.5-  My descriptive plan as model.


5.   Read the following descriptive essay and answer the questions below.





Questions:

1.  Famous writing advice includes the maxim:  "Show, Don't tell."  Provide an example of where Mr. Orwell follows this advice and explain why you believe he follows this advice.

2.  Descriptive essays employ figurative language like similes and metaphors.  Find a simile and a metaphor in "A Hanging" and explain how they each help readers better understand the situation or the image that Orwell is attempting to describe.

3.  Most good essays have a message.  What is Orwell's message, and why do you think it is the message?




6.  Homework... Come to class with a plan/outline for your descriptive essay....

Scavenger Hunt and Evaluation-

1.  Attendance

2.  Papers in and out.

3.  Evaluations.  

4.  Scavenger Hunt!!

In group of your choosing that contains 2-4 members, please photograph yourself or selves either in or in front of the correct places listed below.  Some questions have specific directions.   The goal of this is to make you more aware of services offered to students and to bond as a class and to, well, have fun-

Where is the John Paul Theatre?  (Also, what's a "modified thrust?")

Where can I obtain financial aid?     

Where could I play FIFA 2013?

Where could I buy a PC hoodie?

In the library, take a picture of a book related to First Year Composition.

Where can I work out?

Where can I get help with my English essay?  My math homework?

Where can I take career placement tests?  

I want to check out the Eric Fischel gallery.  Where’s that?

Where’s the science building?  Take a picture of the fossils on the first floor.

I want to join the honors program.  Where’s the office?

I want to become a STEM scholar.  Where would I find info about that?

                                                                                                        

HOMEWORK!  Come back with your final draft for submission.

Effective Revision

1. Attendance

2. Papers in and out...

3. Last minute presentations?

4. Journal

What are your revision and editing strategies?  What do you do?  How does it seem to work?

5. Discussion and list...tps

6. Self editing.  Read aloud.  Changes.

7. SE#2.  Backwards. Changes.

8. Groups and editing questions.

A. Is there a beginning, middle, and end?
B. Does it begin in the middle of the action?
C. Does the introduction make you want to read more?
D. Would you retell this story to someone else?
E. Will you remember this story?
F. What's the topic?
G. What's the purpose?
H. Were there so many mistakes that you couldn't follow the story?
I. Was the writer interesting?
J. Does the writer use cool words?
K.  Summarize the story in 3 sentences.
L. Is this an "A" essay?

9. HOMEWORK:  return with a revised draft.